Wednesday, June 21, 2017
Mike tightened up his rough from last week- I like where it's going.
I bring your attention to panel 1.
Those figures are great-- VERY natural. Not standing stiff. He used reference for how people stand (or he's really good at placing poses).
Changes I made;
I added a stack of clean shiny dishes in panel 1 and panel 2.
I also added the ol' clock on the wall in panel 2.
Panel 3 I put his eyes up as he looks at the clock, it makes the expression less stagnant.
Panel four-- I added the apron and some pegs.
The car in panel 4 is out of perspective if the parking lot is flat because our eye line is up around the top of the time clock, but the lot could have a slant and I like the details in that panel so I left it as is.
Final panel, I just shifted it down, Try not to have the character break the top AND bottom of a panel when you can help it.
Nicely done-- I'd lessen his shoulders and torso to make him look less healthy.
Mike's take on Sam-- I like this-- nice wrinkles in his everyday look.
USE shapes though as you build him. His sideview self and his rearview self have different proportions.